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by Tracy Mitchell
Fri Mar 29, 2024 7:47 am
Forum: National Poetry Month Celebration 2024
Topic: What to Expect
Replies: 2
Views: 16

Re: What to Expect

I was hoping you'd be posting to this one.  Welcome to NaPo, Gyppo.  A couple of years ago you had a very good post about doing this--might you follow that up here?
by Tracy Mitchell
Mon Mar 25, 2024 3:47 pm
Forum: National Poetry Month Celebration 2024
Topic: "NaPo" she says, and pokes again.
Replies: 6
Views: 22

Re: Blasts from the Past--Throwback Moments

My all-time favorite poem about NaPo, and written by a NaPo writer is as follows: An Untitled Poem    by Sharon Leigh (which first wrote itself in her journal "Root Cellar" here on TTB) April is over my shoulder poking my clavicle like my four-year-old used to, saying "look", pointing to the journal...
by Tracy Mitchell
Sat Mar 09, 2024 1:40 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Aunt Lucille
Replies: 6
Views: 1927

Re: Aunt Lucille

On the contrary, Linda, you are MY mentor, and have been for a dozen years (I joined MWC on leap-year day, 2012).
by Tracy Mitchell
Sun Mar 03, 2024 10:33 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: To be Blind, or, All-Knowing
Replies: 4
Views: 4252

Re: To be Blind, or, All-Knowing

Greg, You'll note that one of the benefits of shopping your poems here is that you can get a variety of opinions and reactions, some contradictory.  I can end up with a minority position, I usually prepare my comments before I read previous comments.  I want to approach a poem fresh without predispo...
by Tracy Mitchell
Sun Mar 03, 2024 10:24 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Leaf Blowing Alternatives---Revised
Replies: 5
Views: 4050

Re: Leaf Blowing Alternatives---Revised

This narrative is alluring and invites engagement.   Playful title, works well. L.2 – “the” – delete L.3 – first of 2 “their” in three lines.   L.5 – Maybe change “their” to “a” to eliminate the repeat. It also opens the offer, I think. L.6 – “will remain”  to “remains”; just a thought–more immediat...
by Tracy Mitchell
Sun Mar 03, 2024 10:17 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: What If (Revised)
Replies: 4
Views: 1081

Re: What If (Revised)

Hi Greg-- Scrap it?  NOOOOOOOOOO!! This is a challenging and captivating poem.  I struggle in places, and am awed in other places. The first three-four lines are magnificent.  But L. 5 – if trees were chopped one by one for kindling, that wouldn’t occur in a “matter of moments”.  But then lines 6 &7...
by Tracy Mitchell
Sun Mar 03, 2024 10:13 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: When Persimmon Light will Glow. and Meander
Replies: 1
Views: 2169

Re: When Persimmon Light will Glow. and Meander

I can't tell you how much I like this poem. It feels good, and the craftsmanship is so strong, which no doubt helps the poem feel so very good. I love the way it so casually glows and meanders through the senses--taste, sight, smell, and texture, and or course the motion of the poem.   Artful weavin...
by Tracy Mitchell
Sun Mar 03, 2024 10:11 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Aunt Lucille
Replies: 6
Views: 1927

Re: Aunt Lucille

I love this poem, and your the content of your last posted comment here. This poem finds unsentimentalized ways to humanize everyone involved. I think this was a common way to address neuro-diversity, and I am familiar with the Faribault facility.  S.3 L.2 – consider ending the line with “wrapped”, ...
by Tracy Mitchell
Sun Mar 03, 2024 10:07 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Naming of the parts (Ukulele version.)
Replies: 3
Views: 777

Re: Naming of the parts (Ukulele version.)

Gyppo-- A real heart-warming exchange, both the dialog and the non-verbal, which is several places just carries the narrative. For my money, I'd consider cutting the last line.  It is a prosy conclusion which your poetry readers do not need.  But then, if had your story-telling ability, I am not sur...
by Tracy Mitchell
Sun Mar 03, 2024 10:00 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Weather
Replies: 7
Views: 7155

Re: Weather

Late to the party again, I am. This is an interesting poem--engaging.  It is good to be able to see the versions together. I am not seeing one version completely better than the other, each having their strong points.   On the whole I prefer the first stanza from the modified version, with some comm...