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Hi and welcome, Nancy

Hi and welcome, Jean

Congrats, Jackie
Love the cover.

There appears to be a strange time duality here because while it only seems like yesterday that TTB began it also feels like it's been going forever.
It's longevity is in no small way courtesy of your efforts, Tracy
How are Cornelius and Marc BTW?
Here's to another six years

Comes across loud and clear, Gyppo.
You have a very pleasant and engaging voice.

The message is crystal clear, and you have the voice of a poet.  There's so much to enjoy here, but IMO the message and poem would be intensified/improved with (pardon the pun) some clipping; sometimes less is more. Here's an example of what I mean.  In the violet dome of the trees the vibrant pluma...

So much to enjoy here. Especially the way the N is so absorbed by 'her', and by the magnificence of it all that he's transported back to Jordan.
'Her' obliviousness to it all is so charming 

The modified poem is definitely better. When I read the original now it's trying too hard, and it lacks the visual/sensual precision you're renowned for.  Minor crit, L3 could be split... it looks strange. I've an idea that it's due to whatever device you used to upload it. 'Perched on the verge of ...

A solemn nod of respect, so much implied in the observed details. 
A good write, Gyppo.

Many thanks, Phil and Gyppo   I'm glad this one seems to work