Yes, Sharon's poem is so good.
There was an old man from Éire
who decided to call himself Sarah
so he cut off his flute
wore a dress that was quite cute
and moved to the Rivera.
OK, that was supposed to be a bad NaPo poem... but it morphed away from my intent.
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- Wed Mar 27, 2024 7:05 pm
- Forum: National Poetry Month Celebration 2024
- Topic: "NaPo" she says, and pokes again.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 22
- Sat Mar 23, 2024 7:28 pm
- Forum: National Poetry Month Celebration 2024
- Topic: Accept the challenge
- Replies: 0
- Views: 14
Accept the challenge
Hi all, It's been extremely quiet here lately; I assume that's because you're all saving your energy for NaPo. Or maybe your Muses have put their feet down, demanded some extra time to gird their loins before the long month of April. Anywho, in a little over a week from now you'll all be expected ...
- Sun Jan 14, 2024 4:36 am
- Forum: The Commons
- Topic: TTB Anniversary
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1094
Re: TTB Anniversary
There appears to be a strange time duality here because while it only seems like yesterday that TTB began it also feels like it's been going forever.
It's longevity is in no small way courtesy of your efforts, Tracy
How are Cornelius and Marc BTW?
Here's to another six years
It's longevity is in no small way courtesy of your efforts, Tracy
How are Cornelius and Marc BTW?
Here's to another six years
- Sat Dec 16, 2023 9:01 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: An experiment: Two 'spoken offerings' at this link
- Replies: 10
- Views: 18631
Re: An experiment: Two 'spoken offerings' at this link
Comes across loud and clear, Gyppo.
You have a very pleasant and engaging voice.
You have a very pleasant and engaging voice.
- Thu Dec 07, 2023 7:35 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: The Sunbirds
- Replies: 3
- Views: 4749
Re: The Sunbirds
The message is crystal clear, and you have the voice of a poet. There's so much to enjoy here, but IMO the message and poem would be intensified/improved with (pardon the pun) some clipping; sometimes less is more. Here's an example of what I mean. In the violet dome of the trees the vibrant pluma...
- Thu Nov 23, 2023 6:32 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: The Walls of Alhambra
- Replies: 7
- Views: 6505
Re: The Walls of Alhambra
So much to enjoy here. Especially the way the N is so absorbed by 'her', and by the magnificence of it all that he's transported back to Jordan.
'Her' obliviousness to it all is so charming
'Her' obliviousness to it all is so charming
- Thu Nov 23, 2023 6:02 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Weather
- Replies: 7
- Views: 7155
Re: Weather
The modified poem is definitely better. When I read the original now it's trying too hard, and it lacks the visual/sensual precision you're renowned for. Minor crit, L3 could be split... it looks strange. I've an idea that it's due to whatever device you used to upload it. 'Perched on the verge of ...
- Thu Nov 23, 2023 5:43 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Remembrance Day
- Replies: 4
- Views: 10049
Re: Remembrance Day
A solemn nod of respect, so much implied in the observed details.
A good write, Gyppo.
A good write, Gyppo.
- Thu Nov 23, 2023 5:36 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Silence
- Replies: 9
- Views: 11042
Re: Silence
Many thanks, Phil and Gyppo I'm glad this one seems to work
- Tue Nov 21, 2023 6:54 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Silence
- Replies: 9
- Views: 11042
Re: Silence
Thanks, Dave.
Much appreciated
Much appreciated