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Thank you, Linda, and AJ. Much appreciated.

Crown my head in gray, dear Lord, And bless my tangled tongue. Return to me the mystery I knew when I was young. Before the scorn of cynics, Before the sophist’s sneers Condemned and then converted me And ground me in the gears Of mundane acquisition. Behold the jester’s prize: A stick-strung golden...

Hey Gyppo, I've been lurking around hidden and was not going to post anything before coming up with an excuse for my absence that paints less of an asshole than I am. But I read this and have to comment.  It's light and delightful and fully realizable.  I don't know what to say about this: "becoming...

I love this one, Dave. There is so much packed in here and at no point does it feel contrived or appear to be trying to hard. The "root ourselves" line, short and simple as it may be, speaks so much. Minor nits, suggest: A flurry of images flee s from view, dreams are as fleeting... That's it, and I...

Lovely poem. Just a pleasant read all the way around. Knowing what inspired it is icing on the cake. Congratulations, Gramps!

Sorry, Bri, not one for me.

The content is cool, but the structure is kind of all over the place. I don't understand the line breaks or the placement of rhymes. 

 

Hello Bri,

Glad you found us. hope all has been well.

Marc

To the left a bible             fiction my right arm considers a masturbation--------------- fact a wasting of            s    e     e      d      s a moisture of confusion, a reduction a rethink.  to the right a new book, blank with innocence a waiting of words that don't hurt or revelations in th...

To the left a bible             fiction my right arm considers a masturbation--------------- fact a wasting of            s    e     e      d      s a moisture of confusion, a reduction a rethink.  to the right a new book, blank with innocence a waiting of words that don't hurt or revelations in th...

Enjoy this one a lot. No nits. I wonder if the Line "younger" adds anything, but it doesn't hurt. Great read.