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Great rhythm.

A teacher said I try to hard to say stuff in my poems, i.e., I make it too political, punchy.  Feel that way about this one.

Nice images.  Sounds like an old school poem.  Over my head... about a relationship?

Nice challenge Mark!

Witty!  Had to look up Armitage Shanks.

Thank you everyone who read and commented on this poem.  Every afternoon,  Nicole Wallace, on her show "Deadline Whitehouse" commemorates the lives of one or two people who died from Covid . She told of a couple, married over 60 years, who led full and giving lives, were hospitalized together. They...

Take it further how?

I liked it very much, esp. " one another's hands entwining fingers between them"

An older couple in a small house that collected a lifetime of stuff...

indar wrote: ↑

Fri Jul 10, 2020 4:37 pm

Hi Poet-e,

I can almost read this as the feminine version of The Myth of Sisyphus. There is the one moment the N becomes clean only to have to take on the sins of the world---the ORIGINAL sin even.  Good write.

Thanks!  I'll look that up!

Rain Rain washes my dirty sin soaked stained blood browned tattered torn dress—that’s a bit creamier now. Rain washes my sappy sour sorrows; beating me and my sin soaked stained blood browned dress, like rocks to laundry—a cold cleanse, cooling me. Pouring pellets pelt me, penetrating the coldness’...

Here's a prose poem:
https://poets.org/poem/rome