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A black powder 1868 colt revolver. Dad's rusty Buck knife. A few old Zippo lighters. Ivory figurines haggled over with an illicit trader in Shanghai, same for a two hundred year old silk rug never trod upon. A tin box with a broken clasp containing things I cannot now speak of. Other keepsakes that...

Not too fond of that fancy-pants 'pellucid Dave.

"Their branches
brittle against a canvas
of pale grasses
that soften and deepen, "

Reads a bit clumsy to me, it needs to be more clear to
make the following lines believable.

It's got potential!

Hi Calm Rose,
personally I think we were all fucked decades ago most of us did not know it.
Those animals are out and running loose now.
I am a fighter by nture, but I think I will just sit any current or future wars out.
Thanks for the read and thoughts.

Hi Alien Flower, like your suggestion for the ending lines.
Thanks for the read and the comments.

i Dave
you are wise grasshopper
this old guy is no longer a stud.

We have let the animals out; moonlight flees from the tousled bed. Passions speak loud yet wordless. Impulses drive deep into that frenzy poets call ardor. A macabre shadow dance. paints the walls with a leaking erotica. There are instinctual movements, creatural sounds - the cry of storm gulls, an...

Enjoyed this Indar.
The raised eyebrow and haughty stare can be devastating to ranting politicians, socialist cultural engineers and all those we should not waste words upon.

Hi Indar glad this worked for you. Yes, the war references do seem to be past wars mainly. Once I had established that Far East flavor. I kind of got stuck in the latter conflicts though I hope it reflects wars in general. You are quite right of course, modern warfare is a different kind of barbarit...

Thanks for this warm review Calm Rose,
it's a bit of a splurge, but I hope gets it point across.
Cheers.

It took me awhile to come to grips with this one, but it was worth a few reads.
The silverback image holds well for the trevails of aging
and the scars of life.
An original look at this legendary exitance of ours.