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God gave me a precious life to live. I don't wanna waste my precious time by criticising your poem. It's simply waste of time. You don't have a right to object fellow poet's critique as worthless. Your piece is pretty much worthless! It's lack of everything! Take my comment in a positive way, and tr...

Hi Marc,
Thank you so much for your precious comment on my poem.

Hi Tracy,
Thanks for your precious review. I'll make the corrections based on your suggestions.

Sky smiles, Land gleams, A black-carpet  road welcomes, Trees march, Mary's bus floats,  Snow kisses her cheeks, It blooms smile in her lips She counts the trees by fingers, Her eyes stick the sight, The scenery caress her heart Her hands cling the window The bus reached her house, She falls asleep ...

Thank you so much for your precious comment.
I'll make the changes

Dave, Okok

Moon conquered the sun while darkness rules the entire place The owls make dreadful sounds The breeze in the trees sing a song The dry leaves make a rhythm for the song while the lightning fulfills the haunted theme The nails of my fingers exhausted My eyes were looking around the broad-winged bats...

The dithering ode makes heaviness in heart My oscillating thoughts like flagging boats suffer like stitching bloody heart with tacks Every drop of pouring tears wound my heart. Your sudden fade ruins my life I feel handless to wipe your sorrows, A sad moan disrupts my soul and the world will see th...

Thanks Archaic Torso, Thank you for your comment. But I think, in the second of line of my poem " The flowers sprinkled for another flower's arrival " displays what I want better than your suggestion. I think this sentence describes the angel as flower. So I wished to keep it as like and I accept yo...